Once upon a time, there was a very ugly prince called Charles.
One day, he met a dragon, who lived in a flying house .
The dragon was hungry.
Prince Charles had a cheese sandwich and they shared it.
They became best friends.
One day, he met a beautifil princess and he fell in love. But she didn't love him was because ugly. The prince Charles was sad. The dragon took the prince to a look specialist.
- Please, can you re-look me?
-Yes, I can !
The specialist changed his ears, his nose, his teeth, his hair and gave the prince blue eyes. Charles went home. They, he had an idea.
The next day, the dragon went to see the princess and said
<< I'm going to kill you ! >> She screamed
The prince Charles arrived on a white horse and saved the princess. She fell in love. They got married and they had a lot of children. They dragon was the babysitter.
They lived happy ever after
By Neila.
| Story by Tibo, Ibtissame, Hakima |
Once upon a time , there was the mouse . It lived in the forest and it was courageous and intelligent .
One day , it was looking for food when it found a big house . It went in looking for the fridge .
It didn't fint the fridge but it found a bar of chocolate re-appeared . The mouse felt sick and thew the chocolat out of the window .
Suddenly , a robot appeared .
_ where is my chocolate ? screamed the robot
_ I don't know ! said the mouse
The robot killed the mouse. It didn't find the chocolate so it used the time-machine.
The mouse came back to life. The chocolate came back in the window and the mouse went back to the forest. They lived happily ever after, except the robot because it was sick,
Zahra, Hakima, Manel, Manon, Oméma 5è6
c bien je trouve pour un début
ReplyDeletesghaier 5°6
Well, that's good for pupils in 5ème but I think that it would have been better if you -Mrs.Locke- have corrected their mistakes.
ReplyDeleteSamantha Brendlin, a pupil in 3ème passionated by English -Collège Romain Rolland, Ac Strasbourg-
Hello Samantha and thank your for your comments and encouragements! As for correcting the stories, well...I don't agree. You can perfectly understand the stories, and yes there are some mistakes, but it shouldn't stop you. I hope people will realise that the' most important thing is to be able to communicate ideas in English, the grammatical bit will come later. I need my pupils to DARE :) so leaving their mistakes makes errors acceptable, and no longer a barrier to expression. Does that make sense?
DeleteYeah absolutely and I totally understand what you mean. But well, personally I thought that correcting the stories was something good to do because it's from the mistakes we do that we learn, don't you think?
DeleteFor me, correcting a text is underlined the parts with grammar errors (for example: he is more tall than her) and adding a little box at the end that says the rule (still for example that with short adjectives such as tall, we put -er at the end and that we don't use more).
Ps: Sorry to have taken all that time for answering but I had some troubles for which I needed to find solutions and some training exams for the brevet and I completely forgot you and your site…